What Loving You Was Like



Like the taste of wind escaping my hands.
Like tea gone cold, too steeped, unsipped.
Like letters, writ large upon a wall, such that
     They can be read only one at a time
     And the complete word never grasped.
Like time-travel science, sabotaged by itself
     And terminated before it could learn its own extended secret.
Like a fat cat's dream of gazelle in savanna grass,
     Interrupted by the sound of a tuna can
     Opening.
Like graffiti on train cars, constrained to tracks,
     Observed and forgotten at the momentary
     Crossing of paths, but remembered,
     Perhaps with regret, by its artist.

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This poem was something of a personal challenge. Each image was solicited from people on my Twitter list. Special thanks to sharontherose, charnanigans, and velvetverbosity for supplying the prompts. Incidentally, this poem qualifies for Velvet Verbosity's 100 Word Challenge.

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Sharon T. Rose (not verified)
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Nice!

My fat cat wishes he could eat a gazelle. He's on a diet right now.

Velvet Verbosity (not verified)
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I can't figure out which part is sweeter. That this was inspired by Tweets. That it is exactly 100 Words, and it drives me bonkers when people write POETRY in 100 words. OR that you managed to weave the freaking Higgs Boson Hadron Collider into this poem. You officially rock.

Gabriel
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Big Grin I'm glad you approve. I was rather amused at myself for being able to inject the LHC in this.

Patti (not verified)
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Wonderful imagery!

Gabriel
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Thank you!

Patsy (not verified)
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Wow -- now that is a poem of 100 outstanding words. Wonderful imagery. Well to th 100 Word Challenge spotlight -- you definitely belong there.

Raeven
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mm..

on the one hand, i'm impressed with the form/constraints well met.

on the other hand, i'm sad, because it started out so well, then kinda ... i dunno. not what i thought it would be, i guess

Winnie (not verified)
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Very nice, I will keep reading your poetry. You are very talented

Gabriel
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Thank you!

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