Raptured



You taste like cherry frost
Bedroom sunlight raptured
Captured by subtle sepia crush
A rush of blood to the lips
And tongue, lungs full of the
Steam peeling off your flushed
And shuddering flesh;
We are threshed
Together, separated and laid out
Against sheet canvas cocoons,
Writhed and tithed and tied
Together because I cannot keep my lips
From scouring the valley between
Your shoulders, cannot keep strips
Of my skin from trying to interweave
With yours; lattice-like, enwebbed,
Ebbed and seeping out of myself
And into you; shrike me on your
Lancets, only kiss my pores again,
Pour kisses on me again, take these poor kisses
And illuminate your lips again,
Conjugate our mouths ten
Times, twenty times, as many times
As it takes to swallow all the rhymes
I am seeping out of myself
And into you.

You kiss like
A thistle switch, like God's sunlight
Glitched and wavered,
Flutter shrike, I am struck,
I am plucked and strummed
And humming for you;
I am sung and strung for you,
Draw my tongue into you once more,
Crack your kisses against my throat
Like soap bubble lightning eggs,
Til our legs shudder in time
To the twinkle of a hundred thousand
Jealous white-hot stars.

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Khandroma (not verified)
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Food for the taking. Delicious lustful lust-filled lusting field of gold, framed by black, black and red and red and black. Those white-hot stars, those dragon-eyes, those ever-awake, and we won't sleep till we start from the back and bleed to the beginning. Sacred breath. Heavy breath. Pour this essence all over me, let me stream it sing it from my pores and together we will FALL.

vampire-sighs (not verified)
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Sounds like fun! Smile

Aizenald
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The passion is overwhelming in this piece.

I especially love the sounds and repetition:

"... only kiss my pores again,
Pour kisses on me again, take these poor kisses
And illuminate your lips again..."

"I am sung and strung for you..."

The blood and flesh imagery is powerful.

SorchaRose
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God, I could read this a thousand times and never tire of it.

Sorry, no coherent comment this time, just brutal honesty. Big Grin

Gabriel
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This one was written specifically for a poetry slam, so it's very much a performance piece. I love reciting it, but it's a tongue twister at times. Smile

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