Boys Are Stupid



I walked up for a refill of coffee
And in the beat I missed somewhere
You said,
Boys are stupid.
I agreed with you–
How stupid must I have been
To never notice
Your ice-blue eyes;
To never notice
Your peppermint tongue;
I apologize for
The fallacies of my gender.

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T
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If only other men were so honest Tongue

Diana
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Another interesting piece, I like how you portray this from the other side.

I'd recommend possibly breaking up lines 5-12, though. Possibly a semi-colon after eyes and a period after tongue.

Gabriel
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I'd recommend possibly breaking up lines 5-12, though. Possibly a semi-colon after eyes and a period after tongue.

I never actually noticed the lack of punctuation this piece had. Fixed.

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